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Washington Crossing: A Person in the Boat — Sevenoaks School 11+ (2016)

picture-inspired viewpoint practice, with planning guidance and an original atoply teaching example.

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Picture stimulus

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Writing task

Look at Emanuel Leutze’s painting of Washington crossing the river (1851). Imagine you are one of the people in the boat. Describe the scene, your feelings and your observations in that character’s voice.

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Time: 30 minutes (as indicated for this published task).

Marks: 15.

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Understand the task

Respond to the historic painting Washington Crossing the Delaware from the viewpoint of someone in the boat, describing the scene and their feelings.

  • accurate expression
  • imaginative control
  • structure
  • audience awareness

Requirements to keep in mind

Choose ONE option in the writing section; option 1; 15 marks; 30 minutes advised.

Plan your response

  • Follow the exact instruction, form and viewpoint in the source PDF.
  • Plan a clear beginning and a focused development.
  • Use distinctive details rather than general adjectives.
  • Allow a few minutes to check accuracy before finishing.

Check your response against the task requirements. Leave time to review sentence clarity, punctuation and spelling.

Original atoply example opening

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Reveal example and teaching notes

Cold river water splashed over my boots as the boat lurched between floating slabs of ice. I could barely feel my fingers on the oar. Across the dark water, our commander stood watching the opposite bank. Nobody dared complain. We all knew the crossing mattered, though none of us could be sure what waited beyond the mist.

Learn from the example

  • Concrete details build an impression of the subject. Notice how those choices work together rather than reading as a list of general adjectives.
  • The viewpoint controls what the reader notices. Choose details and an order that sustain the task's requested perspective and atmosphere.

Past paper · 2016. Guidance and example answer by atoply.

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