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Dracula: What Happens Next? — Sevenoaks School 11+ (2023)

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Writing task

Continue the story from the supplied Dracula extract. Write in the first person as the narrator and describe what happens next.

Source passage

‘By and by, however, as I was curious to know how time was passing, I struck a match, and by its flame looked at my watch; it was within a few minutes of midnight. This gave me a sort of shock, for I suppose the general superstition about midnight was increased by my recent experiences. I waited with a sick feeling of suspense.

Then a dog began to howl somewhere in a farmhouse far down the road – a long, agonized wailing, as if from fear. The sound was taken up by another dog, and then another and another, till, borne on the wind which now sighed softly through the Pass¹, a wild howling began, which seemed to come from all over the country, as far as the imagination could grasp it through the gloom of the night. At the first howl the horses began to strain and rear, but the driver spoke to them soothingly, and they quieted down, but shivered and sweated as though after a runaway from sudden fright. Then, far off in the distance, from the mountains on each side of us began a louder and a sharper howling – that of wolves – which affected both the horses and myself in the same way – for I was minded to jump from the calèche² and run, whilst they reared again and plunged madly, so that the driver had to use all his great strength to keep them from bolting. In a few minutes, however, my own ears got accustomed to the sound, and the horses so far became quiet that the driver was able to descend and to stand before them. He petted and soothed them, and whispered something in their ears, as I have heard of horse-tamers doing, and with extraordinary effect, for under his caresses they became quite manageable again, though they still trembled. The driver again took his seat, and shaking his reins, started off at a great pace. This time, after going to the far side of the Pass, he suddenly turned down a narrow roadway which ran sharply to the right. Soon we were hemmed in with trees, which in places arched right over the roadway till we passed as through a tunnel; and again great frowning rocks guarded us boldly on either side. Though we were in shelter, we could hear the rising wind, for it moaned and whistled through the rocks, and the branches of the trees crashed together as we swept along. It grew colder and colder still, and fine, powdery snow began to fall, so that soon we and all around us were covered with a white blanket. The keen wind still carried the howling of the dogs, though this grew fainter as we went on our way. The baying of the wolves sounded nearer and nearer, as though they were closing round on us from every side. I grew dreadfully afraid, and the horses shared my fear; but the driver was not in the least disturbed. He kept turning his head to left and right, but I could not see anything through the darkness.’

¹ A gap between two mountains. ² A horse-drawn carriage.

Time: 25 minutes (as indicated for this published task).

Marks: 15.

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Understand the task

Continue the first-person narrative from the Dracula extract, imagining what happens next as the traveller experiences a frightening midnight carriage journey.

  • accurate expression
  • imaginative control
  • structure
  • audience awareness

Requirements to keep in mind

Choose ONE option in the writing section; option 1; 15 marks; 25 minutes advised.

Plan your response

  • Follow the exact instruction, form and viewpoint in the source PDF.
  • Plan a clear beginning and a focused development.
  • Use distinctive details rather than general adjectives.
  • Allow a few minutes to check accuracy before finishing.

Check your response against the task requirements. Leave time to review sentence clarity, punctuation and spelling.

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Reveal example and teaching notes

The horses stopped so abruptly that I struck my shoulder against the carriage door. Outside, the wolves' cries fell silent. The driver stepped down into the snow, and I heard him speaking softly to something I could not see. When he returned, his gloves were clean and his face was strangely calm. 'We have arrived,' he said. There was no house in sight.

Learn from the example

  • The response reconnects with the source characters and situation instead of retelling the extract. This helps the new writing feel like part of the same scene.
  • Compare the narrator, tense and first action with the passage's final moment. Keep any compulsory opening and paragraph limit when writing your own continuation.

Past paper · 2023. Guidance and example answer by atoply.

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