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Captain Smollett’s Log: Long John Silver — Dulwich College 11+

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In this passage, adapted from early on in Robert Louis Stevenson's famous novel, Treasure Island, young Jim Hawkins relates his first encounters with Long John Silver as they set sail on the Hispaniola.

All that night we were in a great bustle getting things stowed in their place. Ship-mates raced up and down the rigging like rats; barrels of gunpowder were rolled carefully up and down planks; heavy, plaited ropes looped and lashed and bundled belongings together. I was worked until I was about to collapse when, a little before dawn, the boatswain¹ peeped his pipe and the crew began to weigh anchor. I could have been twice as weary, yet I would not have left the deck, all was so new and interesting to me—the brief commands, the shrill of the whistle, the darkened figures of the men hustling to their places in the glimmer of the ship's lanterns.

"Now, Silver, sing us a song!" cried one voice.

"Aye, aye, mates," said Long John, who was standing by with his crutch under his left shoulder, and at once broke out into words all sailors know well: "Fifteen men on the dead man's chest—" And then the whole crew bore chorus: "Yo-ho-ho, and a bottle of rum!"

Soon the anchor was hanging dripping at the bows; soon the sails began to puff out, and the land and shipping to flit by on either side, the whole of Bristol cast in gorgeous pink behind us. The Hispaniola had begun her voyage to the Isle of Treasure.

Captain Smollett, a man whose manner was sharp and short and dry, was on the quarter deck in troubled talks with Mr Trelawney, our sponsor. Trelawney had not only hired the ship, but Silver as well, taking pity on the fact that despite having lost his leg in the service of His Majesty's Navy, Silver had been left without a pension.

"Well, Captain, what have you to say? All shipshape and seaworthy?" inquired Trelawney.

"Better speak plain. I don't like this voyage; I don't like the men; I wish you would have let me choose my own men, instead of Silver."

"But Silver is keeping them all in good spirits!" replied Trelawney.

"Far too good," warned Captain Smollett. "Silver has the key to the grog². And it was Silver's parrot that gave away the sealed orders of our journey."

"Silver's parrot?"

"Blabbed it, sir! Now the whole crew's got wind of it. Don't like it, sir. Don't like it at all."

The first time I had seen Long John Silver he was a landlord at the old tavern in Bristol bay; I had admired the way the man had hopped about with such wonderful dexterity, like a bird, whistling as he moved among the tables. To me, he seemed the best of men. Aboard ship, he carried his crutch by a string around his neck, to have both hands as free as possible. It was something to see him wedge the foot of the crutch against a plank, and, propped against it, yielding to every movement of the ship, get on with his cooking like someone safe ashore. Still more strange was it to see him cross the deck in the heaviest of weather. He had a rope or two rigged up to help him across the widest spaces—Long John's earrings, they were called; and he would hand himself from one place to another, as quickly as another man could walk.

"He's no ordinary man, is Silver," said one of the crew to me. "He had good schooling in his young days and can speak like a book when so minded; and brave a lion's nothing alongside of Long John! I seen him grapple four and knock their heads together and him unarmed."

All the crew respected and even obeyed him. He had a way of talking to each and doing everybody some particular service. To me he was unweariedly kind, and always glad to see me in the galley³, which he kept as clean as a new pin, the dishes hanging up polished and his parrot in a cage in one corner.

"Here's Cap'n Flint—I calls my parrot Cap'n Flint, after the famous pirate—don't I, Cap'n?"

And the parrot would say, at great speed, "pieces of eight! pieces of eight! pieces of eight!" till you wondered why it was not out of breath, or till John threw his handkerchief over the cage.

"Now, that bird," he would say, "was there at the fishing up of the wrecked silver ships o'Spain. It's there she learned 'pieces of eight', and little wonder; three hundred and fifty thousand of 'em, Hawkins!" He would be lost in wonder at the thought of it. "What a man wouldn't do to keep a sum like that to himself," he would add, a heavy hand on my shoulder. "What a man wouldn't do."

Footnotes

¹ Boatswain: The member of the crew responsible for the equipment.

² Grog: A mixture of rum (a sweet brown alcohol derived from sugar cane), lime and water. It was the standard reward for sailors for a good day's work.

³ Galley: The ship's kitchen, usually a very long and narrow space.

⁴ Pieces of eight: The name for a Spanish silver dollar, that could be split up into eight smaller pieces.


Writing task

Now imagine that you are Captain Smollett. Write an entry in your captain's log that records both your admiration but also growing suspicion of Long John Silver. Your ability to incorporate details from the text in your own words will be rewarded, as will an imaginative style that is appropriate to Smollett's character.

In your entries you could write about:

  • What good qualities Long John Silver possesses, his background and behaviour
  • How those same qualities might be dangerous
  • What Long John Silver might be plotting

July 7th, 1775

Fair weather and a steady course south-south-west to Cuba. I can't help but admire this Silver fellow but something about him worries me.

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Understand the task

Captain Smollett must admire Long John Silver while becoming suspicious of him. Balance the captain’s authoritative voice with text-based evidence and a plausible hint of danger.

  • character voice
  • inference
  • evidence in own words
  • historical genre

Requirements to keep in mind

Write a captain’s log; use the given dated opening and preserve both admiration and suspicion.

Plan your response

  • Stay in Captain Smollett’s formal, cautious voice.
  • Include genuine admiration as well as suspicion.
  • Use evidence from the passage in your own words.
  • Show why Silver’s talents could make him dangerous.
  • Suggest a possible plot without claiming it is proved.

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July 7th, 1775

Fair weather and a steady course south-south-west to Cuba. I can't help but admire this Silver fellow but something about him worries me. Long John Silver is a remarkably capable sailor. Though he has only one leg, he moves across the deck with an agility that many sound sailors might envy. His galley is spotless, his meals are served without complaint, and he has a pleasant word for every man aboard. Even young Hawkins appears completely devoted to him.

Nevertheless, I remain uneasy. A cook should not possess such influence over a crew. Men listen to Silver's smallest suggestion as though it were an order from their captain. His easy generosity may be genuine; equally, it may be a convenient way of earning obedience. His control of the grog troubles me particularly.

There is also the unfortunate business of the parrot. Somehow the bird's chatter has helped spread knowledge of our secret destination. A man with Silver's clever mind ought to know better than to speak carelessly before such a creature. Perhaps it was carelessness. Perhaps not.

I have heard him discuss the Spanish treasure with an eagerness that seems less like innocent curiosity than hunger. I shall watch him closely, especially when we near the island. For the present I will keep my suspicions to myself. A captain who distrusts the wrong man creates enemies; a captain who trusts the wrong man may lose his ship.

Learn from the example

  • The voice connects experience with thoughts or feelings, making the response personal rather than a detached report.
  • Develop the link between a particular detail and the narrator's reflection. Keep the requested diary, recount or monologue form in your own answer.

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