Writing task
PART TWO
Retell the story of the fall of Adam and Eve from the perspective of the tree.
[50 marks]
Practise this exact question with personalised feedback on your writing.
Understand the task
The Garden of Eden Through the Tree’s Eyes is a myth retelling task that tests narrative viewpoint, symbolic language, source awareness. Give a non-human narrator perceptions and opinions without losing the familiar moral tension.
- narrative viewpoint
- symbolic language
- source awareness
- originality
Requirements to keep in mind
Writing marks: 50 (subject to separately awarded SPaG marks)
Plan your response
- Give a non-human narrator perceptions and opinions without losing the familiar moral tension.
- Plan a clear beginning, development and ending within the time available.
- Use precise vocabulary and vary sentence lengths where appropriate.
- Proofread spelling, punctuation and paragraphing before finishing.
Check your response against the task requirements. Leave time to review sentence clarity, punctuation and spelling.
Short atoply teaching example
Written by atoply, not an official school answer or mark scheme. This short illustration shows selected techniques. It does not set a target length or expected mark for the timed task.
Reveal example and teaching notes
I had stood in the garden before either of them learned the names of things. Birds nested in my branches, and the morning light touched my fruit like warm fingers. I heard the serpent long before Eve approached; it spoke softly, with the patience of rain wearing through stone. She reached up. I wanted to shake every apple from my boughs and scatter them beyond her grasp. Yet trees have roots, not hands. When they tasted the fruit, the garden grew suddenly quiet. For the first time, I understood that knowledge could cast a shadow.
Learn from the example
- The example focuses on one situation, keeping the action easy to follow. Notice how a detail, action or decision moves that situation forward.
- Use the task's requirements to plan the development and ending of your own response; an opening alone does not demonstrate a complete story arc.